This is a short verse i wrote when i was feeling down sometime. Here it is below.


"Them People"


(Verse)
This place, this time, this life is all just a lie,
i cant live no more i just want to die,
them people pissin me off but i guess its their loss,
its just no more for me and more for them i write this music from deep within,
and never look back on my past again,
all the things that went wrong all my mistakes this shit is driving me crazy,
and its stuff i cant take from comming home late to that being my fate,
this shit is driving me insane so i just look at my peers and remember their face,
and just think i got to live it again the next day,
leave me alone and let me sit in my casket everyone knows ill be holding that hatchet.

What ya think.

Pretty good. I'd bang it.

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Not bad, I liked some verses.

Thanks..i love to write music. Check more from me..

I hate when work contradicts itself in an obnoxious way.

"i cant live no more i just want to die,
them people pissin me off but i guess its their loss,"

Seems as though you focused more on creating a unique piece of work that you actually forgot to put your real emotions in it, which makes it unique.

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unf

Yeah. See but i write from the underground. I know what you mean. But if you knew how i wrote you would see that is part of it. I listen to music different from others. And they write dark, wickedly, and different. But thanks =) i knew what ya meant.

It's alright, nothing stellar, but alright.

it's alright ...