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Under the ground lay
A seed fertile and ready
Water to start life

A man stands above
Awaiting his beloved crops
A hatchet in hand

Swing of his right arm
He swings again and again
Prize lands at his feet

Sold on the market
Tonight a family eats
A price of a life

6/10 ... sorry but it didnt really make sense to me, and im more of into rhyming things... but it is some nice work that is put together

I think it could have flowed better but it was pretty good.

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i actually think it was beautiful has alot of meaning but yea it could have flowed better

The feelings of mine....


In the heart of a seed,
Buried deep so deep,
A tiny plant
Lay fast asleep.
"Wake," said the sunshine,
"And creep to the light."
"Wake," said the voice
Of the raindrops bright.
The little plant heard
And it rose to see,
What the wonderful,
Outside world might be.




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I don't get it lol

i didnt really get it but it wasnt to bad

A plant will grow from a tiny seed,
Some water and sun is all you need.
First the roots grown underground,
They suck up minerals from all around.
Then come stems, some tall, some stout,
And next the branches spread about.
Leaves grow in all shapes and sizes,
Watch this new life as it rises.
Flowers bloom from buds on stems,
They are as pretty as precious gems.
Some plants give us juicy fruit,
Some have vegetables at the root.
New seeds travel to and fro,
By wind and water, on the go.
And the cycle keeps on going,
Soon new stems and leaves are showing.



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