Well normal critique wise i would give it a 3.5/10 for the effort you put into it.
Beginner Id say a 7/10
What is wrong is:
The focal is over sharpened quite a bit, The clipmasked splatter brushes lack any real flow, text rarely goes over a focal, nice attempt at what I am guessing is c4d usage but not there fully. Besides the c4d looking stuff over the render and the splatter brushes there are no other effects. Work on your composition, try using a stock background and play around with it, try to make your focal a little bigger and try to off center it a little bit.